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Thursday, September 10, 2020

Writing

Hi guys!

Kezia here. Today I'll be sharing my writing work today. We had to choose if we wanted to choose a picture or if we could make a random narrative story.  I choose a random narrative story .We also had to do a self assessment of our story to see if it was good or not. We had varies questions we had to answer and there were 4 different levels.  I think i'm a blue writer because My Narrative has an:  Introduction, Problem & Solution in paragraphs, including great word choices. Read my story and see if you agree with me.


It was a normal day at the office, everyone was working or going on big investigations. Oh expect for Gary Harper. Gary is the greediest police you could ever know of. He takes all the credit for something he didn't do, it's probably because the head chief makes him do cases with other people. But today is different! Today Gary is finally going to do a case by himself. 

“WHAT?!” Yelled Gary making everyone look at him. “It's a crime case. A man is taking all the donuts so the police officers don't have any. Find him” Said the head chief. Gary walked away in disbelief and wondering how he can work by himself. 

The day had arrived, it was the day Gary was starting his case. He's sitting in the security camera room looking at the screens waiting for someone to come. He tried hiring some other people to do it for him but eventually the chief found out.“This is boring.”Gary said while putting his hand on the table and laying his head on it. Gary looked at the screens and saw a man in all black leaving the shop, with donuts and the cashier yelling at him. Gary quickly gets up, runs downstairs, leaves the shop and gets into his car. He then realized that he didn't know how the car looked. Out of frustration he honks the car harshly. 

 The next week Gary was waiting in the same place as last week. He knew the guy wouldn't come everyday so he waited, and waited, until he heard shouting from downstairs. He quickly looked through the cameras and saw a car leaving while a man was chasing that car. He saw the number plate and wrote it down. “HRZ637”He quietly said to himself over and over again. 

“Chief chief!” said Gary running into the office, “WHAT?! I'M IN AN IMPORTANT MEETING!”Yelled the chief.“I've found him!”Gary said in an excited voice. “Where is he?”asked the chief, getting out of his chair. “Um I don't have him?”Gary said while scratching the back of his head. “THEN FIND HIM YOU IDIOT!”The chief said while slamming the door on Gary. 

The next day Gary tracked down the car with a device and found that he was going somewhere. He hopped into his car and followed the car. 

 3 HOURS LATER Gary had been following this car for 3 hours now. “When is this going to end??” Said Gary in a sleepy tone. He looked up to see where the car was going but nothing was there. “Wha-” Suddenly Gary crashed into a post making him pass out. 

Gary rubbed his eyes and got up.“Where am I?”Asked Gary while looking around. There were doves flying everywhere and the trees were swishing back and forth. It was like a magical forest, actually that's what it was, a Magical forest. There was a humongous tree which had a small city on top of it. There were beautiful trees surrounding Gary. He walked until he found some fairies talking. One fairy turned around and looked at Gary. 
 “Gary! I was looking for you!”
 “You were?”
 “Yes! Now can I trust you Gary?” 
“Uh.. yeah sure.” 
“Can you hold this?”

 The fairy gave Gary $1,ooo,ooo check. 

 “Gary use this wisely. Alright?”
 “What am I meant to use it on?” 
“Use it to help people. DON'T use it on yourself.”
POOF!
 All of the magical forest disappeared and now Gary was back in his car driving. “RING RING!” Went Gary's phone. 
 “Hello?”
 “Gary! You've found him!” 
“What? Oh yeah! Yeah I found him!” 
 “Come back to the station” 

And just like that the chief cut the phone and now Gary was driving back to the station. 

Ever since that day Gary has become a sweet and nice policeman. He even started his own police station. Gary used the money on donating to the poor and started charities. That's how Gary Harper became a nice police man.


Thank you guys for reading my story! See you in the next blog post! Bye!!!

1 comment:

  1. Hi Kezia
    Thanks for sharing your narrative story. I like your use of descriptive language and inclusion of direct speech. Is is always clear who is speaking ?
    You have written a clear beginning, middle and end. It's great to set yourself some goals of your own to focus on next time. What are your areas of development?

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